"The Bargain" by Henry Szabranski appeared in Daily Science Fiction on May 27, 2013. "You wait in horror as a mysterious fog erases the world around you."
Second person POV is difficult to pull off--you know what I mean. It has the potential to make the narrative more immediate and personal, but at the same time more in-your-face and annoying. Its use in "The Bargain" is not successful. In addition, while a certain amount of backstory must be left unsaid in a flash fiction piece, if too much is left unsaid, the reader is either left hanging or left with the feeling of reading a small part of a larger work. In this regard, too, the story comes up short. 3 out of 7 rocket-dragons.
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