Thursday, June 21, 2018

"pleasant distractions" by Lauren McBride

"Paths" Watercolor on Paper
By J. Artemus Gordon
pleasant distractions 
unplanned paths 
my walk takes longer

--Lauren McBride

Poet's Notes: I love walking around outdoors but rarely go in a straight line. The reason for the walk doesn't matter, be it a trip to the mailbox, my garden, or a nature center. What matters to me is noticing what each season has to offer and taking the time to enjoy it. 

This poem follows a form new to me, the Lune, invented by poet Robert Kelly. Also known as the American Haiku, a Lune consists of 13 syllables arranged in a 5-3-5 pattern. The typically short third line causes the right text margin to curve in like a crescent moon. Unlike traditional haiku, there is no requirement for a seasonal word or cutting word. In addition, metaphor, meter, and rhyme are all allowed.

Editor’s Note:  My thanks to Lauren for introducing the Lune form to me and for providing this nice example of it for Songs of Eretz!  I enjoy the way the curve of the lune echoes the theme of the poem in this one.

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